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White noise, white light
Moonlight, sleep tight
Pick up your pen
Your notebook then
Let your body loose.

They're all sleeping
But your heart is keeping
Inventory
Of all the cracks
Rips and craters
Sanity- see you later.

They're all sleeping
But your mind is beeping
One new message
To be played
How it wants out!
What's it thinking 'bout?

They're all sleeping
But your soul is creeping
All around
Must you meddle?
Only want to see
Ancient history?

Smothered
Quilts and inquisitions.
Conspirators come out.
Heart mind and soul
Ready to shout
Everything you are about.

Do you want to risk a dream?
What might they show?
The Being's in control
And what's unleashed
Subconscious-
Absolutely monstrous.

The Being
Picks up the pen
The notebook then
Cuts the body loose
And now she's ruler
Reign over the other 3.

Once my friend
They existed in harmony
Body, heart, mind, soul and
The Being
But the Being wanted more:
She broke down every door.
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We all have a dark side.


Rhythm and form just got thrown all over the place with this one. It's there to a point, but I keeping with it seemed too neat and tidy for the feel I was going for. Do you think it works or does it need some more rigid structure?
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~SageFillyLuna Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
really wonderful. i kind of get like this at night. very interesting concept and i like your writing style quite a lot.
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~lalaith913 Jul 8, 2012   Writer
Thanks! Whenever I'm in my "darker moods," I feel like this is what my writing style becomes.
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~SageFillyLuna Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i like your "dark side" lol
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~lalaith913 Jul 8, 2012   Writer
She doesn't stop by too often, but she's a delight hahaha.
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~SageFillyLuna Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
indeed
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